书信体作文，是中考英语作文中常见的考查形式，相比别的作文形式，书信体作文更重视作文格式。在满分15分中，仅格式就占1分到2分。
本期《作文擂台》，我们请洛阳外国语学校、市四十五中教师从六校联考初三英语试卷中各抽出4篇作文，并邀请市五十六中、龙城双语初级中学的英语教师进行打分。在此，我们对其中两篇有代表性的作文进行打分、点评，希望能给初三学生提供帮助。
题目：书面表达（15分）
假如你是Mike,你的朋友Bob有很多问题，感到压力重重，现在向你求助。请根据表格中提供的信息，给他写一封回信。短文中不得出现真实的校名或人名，词数80左右。
点评教师：
评分标准：
1.符合题目要求；2.内容完整；3.层次结构清晰；4.表达清楚；5.语言无误。
评分一般分为四挡：第一档13分到15分；第二档9分到12分；第三档4分到8分；第四档0分到3分。
得分秘诀：
●亮点句式
“近两年，中考英语阅卷队伍中加入一部分高中英语老师，这就对中考英语作文的要求提高了。” 付欣利说，作文中必须有亮点句式，这些亮点句式可以是高一英语的重点内容——定语从句，也可以是一些“万金油”式的复合句，也可以是强调句、only引导的倒装句等。
●注意细节
“中考英语作文，在达到句子结构等硬性要求的情况下，如果细节没有出现错误，拿高分或满分并不难。” 孙怿说，不过，很多学生容易在单词拼写、语法等细节方面出错。所以，她提醒初三学生，写完一定要逐字逐句检查。
●卷面整洁
“卷面也很重要，考试时，不要随意用斜体，不能有较多涂改痕迹。”付欣利提醒道。
市四十五中九年级（９）班 柳若冰
Dear Bob,
I am Mike. I am happy to hear from you. In the letter, you said that you have some problems. So I will give you some advice.
You always feel lonely and you are not good at making friends with your classmates. You also worry about your study and you can't sleep well. So I think that you should go to some parties and make some friends. At the same time, you should talk with your teachers and classmates. That will help you a lot. You should do some outdoor sports and drink some milk before you go to bed. You shouldn't watch exciting TV programs.
I believe you can do better. Good luck!
Yours.
Mike
孙怿：英语作文得满分并非很难，这张试卷漂亮的书写，会大大增加阅卷老师的好感，文章层次结构也非常清晰，完全符合英文书信的格式：开头点题，总领全文；正文部分逻辑清晰，层次分明；结尾虽没有过多的修饰性语句，但语言简洁清晰，落款得当，属于中考评分中的第一档作文，得分应为15分。
洛阳外国语学校九年级（9）班 孙欣然
Dear Bob.
I’m happy that you write a letter to me. I think I can help you to solve these problems,you say that you always feel lonely and you are not good at making friends, well,I think you can join more parties and activities. Then you can be better by talking with your teachers and classmates. To sleep well,you should do more sports outside. Drink a cup of milk do help,too. Remember that don’t watch exciting TV programs. If you do so, you will feel better.
Yours,Mike.
付欣利：本篇作文符合题目要求，内容较完整，层次清晰，加分句、亮点句使用准确恰当，除you say that you always feel lonely and you are not good at making friends句中，主句时态可能有争议外，无明显错误。文中未提及要求中担心学习一项内容，再加上本文没有分段，个别标点使用不准确，根据字迹、卷面，得分应为13分。
洛阳外国语学校九年级（8）班 李楠
Dear Bob.
I'm sorry to hear that you are very nervous. Here are（is） some advice for you to wok out the problems.
When you feel lonely,or you thinks（think） you are bad at making friends,you'd better try taking part in more partys（parties）. It will help you. It will improve your talking skills,and then you can make more friends.
If you worry about you can't sleep or study well. Why not have a communication with your teacher or classmates? You also can do some exercises outside. And drinking milk before you sleep is also a good way.But you aren't allowed to watch exiting programs.
I hope you can become better soon.
Yours.
Mike
付欣利：此篇作文基本符合要求，但是错误点比较多。中考改卷要求是语法错误每处扣一分，拼写、词汇用法、大小写、标点错误每处扣0.5分。文中使用加分句Here倒装句时，没有注意不可数名词advice，错把原本应该单数的动词is，写为are。另外，you think错写为you thinks , parties 错写为partys，都是本文的扣分点。就作文内容来说，本篇作文应评为第二档，根据字迹、卷面，得分应为12分。
